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La Vejez - The Winter by elEstela La Vejez - The Winter by elEstela
Todos llevamos un viejo encima.... Dibujo hecho a partir de una fotografía que encontré de un joven artista valenciano llamado Alex francés. Técnica mixta en 50 x70 cm. La canción que acompaña el dibujo es "Llegar a Viejo" del gran Joan Manuel Serrat


<div align="center">Si se llevasen el miedo,
y nos dejasen lo bailado
para enfrentar el presente...
Si se llegase entrenado
y con ánimo suficiente...

Y después de darlo todo
- en justa correspondencia -
todo estuviese pagado
y el carné de jubilado
abriese todas las puertas...

Quizá llegar a viejo
Sería más llevadero,
Más confortable,
Más duradero.

Si el ayer no se olvidase tan aprisa...
Si tuviesen más cuidado en donde pisan...

Si se viviese entre amigos
que al menos de vez en cuando
pasasen una pelota...
Si el cansancio y la derrota
no supiesen tan amargo...

Si fuesen poniendo luces
en el camino, a medida
que el corazón se acobarda...
y los ángeles de la guarda
diesen señales de vida...

Quizá llegar a viejo
Sería más razonable,
más apacible,
más transitable.

¡Ay, si la veteranía fuese un grado...!
Si no se llegase huérfano a ese trago...

Si tuviese más ventajas
y menos inconvenientes...
Si el alma se apasionase,
el cuerpo se alborotase,
y las piernas respondiesen...

Y del pedazo de cielo
reservado para cuando
toca entregar el equipo,
repartiesen anticipos
a los más necesitados...

Quizá llegar a viejo
sería todo un progreso,
un buen remate,
un final con beso.

En lugar de arrinconarlos en la historia,
convertidos en fantasmas con memoria...

Si no estuviese tan oscuro
a la vuelta de la esquina...
O simplemente si todos
entendiésemos que todos
llevamos un viejo encima.

También es mi entrada para el concurso de invierno de :iconskyqeen: Y que mejor forma de representar el invierno que dibujando a una mujer de pelo cano en el ocaso de su vida? Suscitando la melancolía que evoca el invierno. Espero que os guste y que me votéis ^^
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Critique by mysticpencil1 mysticpencil1/critique/421097377">Jul 19, 2011, 5:54:52 PM
This moving piece is phenominal. It's sensitivity to the subject is the highlight here as well as the mood. This is an honest and touching view of the subject I think which adds to the interest of her. So many artists have done portraits of maturely aged people but this one to me is different. I've felt like that before unfortunately and the expression expresses the mood perfectly. It's accuracy adds to the precision technique used to render the piece.
I am not sure if it's watercolor or oil which adds more interest to the piece instead of subtracting from it. The realism to the expression and figure placement makes it breathe almost and even though it's black and while makes me see it in color. The tones are rich and flow expertly into the next.
I can be here all night describing it to you but this impacted me in a large way because of the handling of the subject and the subjects mood. And I love pictures that look off to the side into nowhere but again it was a new way of expressing a widely used aged portrait. That's why I gave it what I gave it.
Again I say this portrait is breathtaking and spot on. Also I'm truly moved by the professional manner in which the piece was rendered. Absolutely beautiful handling of the mediium here.
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:iconmanuvicius:
manuvicius Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Muy bueno, me recuerda mucho a las fotografías de  Lee Jeffries
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KaoriN8 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
I wish I knew what you wrote below the image ... but if it's as good as the drawing it must be mindblowing *O*
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xxthirststarxx Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
It's me:3 they I so amazing your drawings take u to high arts
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:iconturquoisepastel:
TurquoisePastel Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
very realistic..and i like how you've added her natural lines on her face ^^
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:iconazulcohelo:
azulcohelo Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Me encantan las fotos y dibujos de personas con arrugas y lineas en su cara, pienso en cada linea como una historia, una anecdota, algo terrible quizás. Felicitaciones es muy bella
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:iconhermitsrme:
hermitsrme Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Fantastic image
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:iconmarloma:
marloma Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is fabulous. cheers anne
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daxusx Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012
excelente:squee:
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ShahlalalaLH Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
...El rostro de la anciana me hizo sentir algo, esa mirada tan profunda, realmente impresionante. Aunque se me hace algo pequeño el torso hablando de proporciones...Igualmente felicidades, es un dibujo precioso :D
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WolfBloodStudios Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you did amazing on this, you did so great on the shading and showing the wrinkles and everything, and it gives off a sense of sadness when you look at her expression
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:iconpackoalonso:
packoalonso Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012   Photographer
divino en verdad es en verdad una linda esencia
saludos
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:icongeemassamart:
GeeMassamArt Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is a strong piece, the expression of loss or longing is accurate and very melancholy. It looks terrific, your tone and line are really skilful. wow.
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annaescapicua Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Me ha impactado un montón éste, me gusta mucho ♥
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:iconelestela:
elEstela Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
me alegro mucho guapa^^. un saludo desde Valencia!
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:iconshady767:
shady767 Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2012  Student General Artist
this is amazing! the emotion u portrayed thru this piece is breathtaking!
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:iconmariapereira:
MariaPereira Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
This is simply mesmerising!
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:iconkiwitakeflight:
KiwiTakeFlight Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Professional Photographer
Fantastic work!
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:iconpolichet:
Polichet Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That is so amazing! Stunning artwork! You are very talentious! This portrait is gorgeous! Great job!
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Gubble Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012
Me gusta que ese dibujo muestra una mujer vieja. La gente dibuja muchamente las caras jóvenes pero en mi opinion las caras viejas son tan bonitas.
Es una obra muy lograda!
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DhanThePilgrim Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's good! It shows the emotion of an old woman, who has aged, and who has yet more mischief to do, but no youth left to carry out. More sadness and wear, but too exhausted to care. Well done. :)
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talkin2wallz Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
sighhh iwish i could read the spanish :I this is really beautiful as well (:
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:iconcadycassy:
Cadycassy Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012  Student Digital Artist
me gusto mucho tu trabajo
la vejez es un tema bastante complejo
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:iconspirosk-photography:
spirosk-photography Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
*very* well made. Like it!
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:iconmaggiefurfriend:
MaggieFurfriend Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Lovely detail with the ink lining the wrinkles ^^
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LoveDestructive Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Student Writer
what a perfectly applied concept.
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Cobwebbish Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011
That's a wonderful picture!
Even though she's old, and she looks somewhat wistful, there's still a timeless kind of grace and beauty about her.
Very touching!
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M4XW3LL Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Student General Artist
esta padre el claro obscuro, la proporción y los detalles no me convencen mucho pero vas muy bien,

dices tecnica mixta pero seria bueno que especificaras mas si fue carboncillo, tiza, lapices si fue lapiz de que grosor y tipo de papel, esto nos puede ayudar bastante a tus watchers para darse mas idea e inspirarse...
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elEstela Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
Pues te cuento. Pongo tecnica mixta porque ultimamente en DA me estoy encontrando a muchos "puristas" por asi decirlo que consideran que trabajar con boligrafo y derivados como que desprestigia la "obra de arte" (ya ves tu que tonteria) En fin. El trabajo, como la mayoria de mis dibujos esta hecho a boligrafo difuminado con disolvente universal para conseguir el moldeado de su cara. Ademas con la dificultad añadida de que lo dibuje sobre cartulina extremadamente porosa y apenas conseguia trabajar en el entramado de linias que definiria el rostro.
Dices que la proporcion y los detalles no te convencen pero ya te aseguro que esta dibujada tal y como aparece en la foto... si es cierto que al tener de referencia una foto de pesima calidad sobre la obra afecto sobremanera a que no pude trabajar mejor los detalles. Es un error que desde este trabajo ya estoy erradicando.
Pero si que te dare la razon con lo de atinar mas a la hora de describir la tecnica. No eres el unico que me lo ha comentado ya pero tmbien es cierto que al ser estos trabajos antiguos no le he dedicado tiempo a cambiar las descripciones.
Muchas gracias por tus comentarios. Ten por seguro que pedire tu opinion para el proximo trabajo que tengo pensado subir. Al igual que tu puedes pedir la mia ^^. Un saluo desde Valencia!
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M4XW3LL Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Student General Artist
ok amigo , sera un placer darte una critica constructiva, al igual te aviso en cuanto suba algo nuevo, para que me des tu punto de vista..

Saludos
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:iconitzia:
Itzia Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2011
Esta mirada da mucho que pensar...
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Oroshigane Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This piece is incredible realistic! Excellent eye for detail!
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Scarlet-Fae Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2011
Thats amazing and lovely and wow :)
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trumanlakequeen Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
amazing
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:iconlibellchen:
libellchen Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2011  Professional
beautiful portrait!
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sefalet Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Professional Interface Designer
good work
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artsaves1228 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really love the harshness of the lines of the face, it actually makes her look almost like glass, like she's broken. very cool :D
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dakryon Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
damn! awesome!
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batorr Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2011
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elEstela Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
thanks a lot for the featured!! I really appreciate it!
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Johanthegerbilnator Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Wow, just wow. I have no words for this piece of art :3!
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Roguejames Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011
This is beautiful
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:iconhir77:
hir77 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011   Traditional Artist
Me gusta tu estilo! Excelente trabajo!
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xXVampireDreamerXx Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Student General Artist
This deviation has been featured here [link] as part of :iconthedeviantartgallery:'s member feature. I hope you enjoy the feature! :D
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DreamsOfNostalgia Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Es simplemente hermosa.
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Aicent Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
I really love the lighitng above anything else , it really gives it a unique feel,I often don;t like pencil works but this is remarkable !
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mysticpencil1 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2011
Stunning realism here. I think other fine artists should take notes on composition because this one has the best composition I've seen to date. And the mood and sensitivity of this portrait is a plus. Phenominal and breathtaking. Excellent work.
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wanderlust300 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011   Traditional Artist
this is beautiful...her expression is haunting...
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daxusflashlight Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2011
uy que bueno esto!!!!!
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Orionica Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2011
just perfect!..
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